Nexii's Erotic Adventures: Save vs Torture

[Moerne]

One of your best I thought, glad you found the motivation to get it done!

It really was a great blend of the erotica with the adventure and humor.

[Nexii]

Originally Posted by Moerne [You must be logged in to view images. Log in or Register.]

One of your best I thought, glad you found the motivation to get it done!

It really was a great blend of the erotica with the adventure and humor.

Thanks ^^

Yea things have been tough lately but sometimes negative emotions can be inspiration too.

[Metham]

Enjoyed it very much. Dont worry about the length so much, perfect for med breaks between quads. 3 quads later and im finished [You must be logged in to view images. Log in or Register.]

[Rygar]

Originally Posted by Nexii [You must be logged in to view images. Log in or Register.]

I am using these as practice towards writing a real novel. I don't consider myself quite 'there' yet with my writing skill. Novels are much longer than these short stories. This one was like 3400 words whereas a novel tends to be 50k-100k words.

I mean I get it, most of the audience of P99 is video game players (visual) and not avid readers. At the same time it probably isn't a time thing. People here spend 16+ hours socking dragons week in week out. A story this long might take 10-15 minutes to read through. Given all the downtime in EQ I figure it's one of many things one can do to fill it.

I wasn't implying this was stand alone novel, but rather a stand-alone chapter from a novel (seemed similar length).

Also, I think there is truth to who you are presenting your story to. People seem to come here for a quick read or meme and then move on to the next subject. It's like asking someone to read a single story while waiting for the bus... they have the time, but they are more interested in surfing the net or reading headlines or watching a show. Arguing that 'well they have the time' just isn't going to work because they may consider their time best invested elsewhere.

So just saying, your style of erotica may not be best suited here. My guess is most people want you to get to the dirty details, which defeats the purpose of a tantalizing build-up (or makes it more challenging).

The story takes more purpose and length, perhaps, because you are writing about yourself. If you substituted 'Nexii' for a different name and made the character's personality a pure fiction (rather than a reflection of yourself) you may see the need to consolidate some parts?

This is just my feedback of course, maybe some people think it is good as is. As they say, you do you!

[Nexii]

Originally Posted by Rygar [You must be logged in to view images. Log in or Register.]

I wasn't implying this was stand alone novel, but rather a stand-alone chapter from a novel (seemed similar length).

Also, I think there is truth to who you are presenting your story to. People seem to come here for a quick read or meme and then move on to the next subject. It's like asking someone to read a single story while waiting for the bus... they have the time, but they are more interested in surfing the net or reading headlines or watching a show. Arguing that 'well they have the time' just isn't going to work because they may consider their time best invested elsewhere.

So just saying, your style of erotica may not be best suited here. My guess is most people want you to get to the dirty details, which defeats the purpose of a tantalizing build-up (or makes it more challenging).

The story takes more purpose and length, perhaps, because you are writing about yourself. If you substituted 'Nexii' for a different name and made the character's personality a pure fiction (rather than a reflection of yourself) you may see the need to consolidate some parts?

This is just my feedback of course, maybe some people think it is good as is. As they say, you do you!

I've had feedback both ways. When I was doing shorter segments several readers told me they felt too rushed/frantic. And then some say TL;DR with slower pace but less frequent stories. Can't really please everyone.

I mean I won't disagree as far as typical RnF audience. I asked for creation of a roleplay/story forum but the mods never got back on it. IMO it's something the community really lacks. Back on live it was a lot more common. More collaborative stories with multiple writers could be interesting/fun.

[maskedmelon]

i think your writing style is compact enough that you could easily parse this last post into liek 3 or 4 smaller bites. retain all the good stuff, but adopt a less daunting presentation ^^