Nexii's Erotic Adventures: Save vs Torture

[Rygar]

Originally Posted by Nexii [You must be logged in to view images. Log in or Register.]

I am using these as practice towards writing a real novel. I don't consider myself quite 'there' yet with my writing skill. Novels are much longer than these short stories. This one was like 3400 words whereas a novel tends to be 50k-100k words.

I mean I get it, most of the audience of P99 is video game players (visual) and not avid readers. At the same time it probably isn't a time thing. People here spend 16+ hours socking dragons week in week out. A story this long might take 10-15 minutes to read through. Given all the downtime in EQ I figure it's one of many things one can do to fill it.

I wasn't implying this was stand alone novel, but rather a stand-alone chapter from a novel (seemed similar length).

Also, I think there is truth to who you are presenting your story to. People seem to come here for a quick read or meme and then move on to the next subject. It's like asking someone to read a single story while waiting for the bus... they have the time, but they are more interested in surfing the net or reading headlines or watching a show. Arguing that 'well they have the time' just isn't going to work because they may consider their time best invested elsewhere.

So just saying, your style of erotica may not be best suited here. My guess is most people want you to get to the dirty details, which defeats the purpose of a tantalizing build-up (or makes it more challenging).

The story takes more purpose and length, perhaps, because you are writing about yourself. If you substituted 'Nexii' for a different name and made the character's personality a pure fiction (rather than a reflection of yourself) you may see the need to consolidate some parts?

This is just my feedback of course, maybe some people think it is good as is. As they say, you do you!