Thread: Nexii's Erotic Adventures: Like Old Times
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Old 10-28-2020, 10:28 PM
Hrothgar Hrothgar is offline
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Prose lacks depth; too much telling - not enough showing. Plot arc is tired, try a little anachronism here and there. Otherwise, the dialogue is believable.