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Originally Posted by Rygar
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I wasn't implying this was stand alone novel, but rather a stand-alone chapter from a novel (seemed similar length).
Also, I think there is truth to who you are presenting your story to. People seem to come here for a quick read or meme and then move on to the next subject. It's like asking someone to read a single story while waiting for the bus... they have the time, but they are more interested in surfing the net or reading headlines or watching a show. Arguing that 'well they have the time' just isn't going to work because they may consider their time best invested elsewhere.
So just saying, your style of erotica may not be best suited here. My guess is most people want you to get to the dirty details, which defeats the purpose of a tantalizing build-up (or makes it more challenging).
The story takes more purpose and length, perhaps, because you are writing about yourself. If you substituted 'Nexii' for a different name and made the character's personality a pure fiction (rather than a reflection of yourself) you may see the need to consolidate some parts?
This is just my feedback of course, maybe some people think it is good as is. As they say, you do you!
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I've had feedback both ways. When I was doing shorter segments several readers told me they felt too rushed/frantic. And then some say TL;DR with slower pace but less frequent stories. Can't really please everyone.
I mean I won't disagree as far as typical RnF audience. I asked for creation of a roleplay/story forum but the mods never got back on it. IMO it's something the community really lacks. Back on live it was a lot more common. More collaborative stories with multiple writers could be interesting/fun.