Writing a new song, work in progress

[bled12345]

so awhile ago I posted some shit I was making, i'm still working on producing electronica haha and its slowly starting to get better sounding!!

I'm working on this song right now, prolly like 10 hours deep cause I'm still learning ableton live 8 finally but I think its starting to come together! Any suggestions? It's only like 1/3rd of the way done but I think the whole song structure is starting to be pretty sound.

anyways cheers and enjoy!

http://soundcloud.com/jtungsten/first-song-in-awhile

[Diggles]

I think the bass needs a little more oomph, but other than that, I like.

[Diggles]

Props, I could never make electronic music. I have a hard enough time recording actual instruments!

[bled12345]

haha thanks man, I couldn't agree more with the bass lol its just kind of a filler bass line until I finish more of the song and can put something more epic in there without stepping over everything else.

I'm having a tough time with the bridge from the main chorus to the finish too hence the blank nothing sound for 20 seconds hahahaha. But cheers man thanks!

What do you play? Music is awesome, my grandma forced me into piano at an early age lol.

[Diggles]

I play bass for a jazz band and guitar for a little metal jam group I play with, also a drummer.

[purest]

sounds dildos

[bled12345]

sounds dildos

lolz

[loopholbrook]

Fuck this, my blues song is better than this. http://soundcloud.com/loopholbrook/the-black-wiis

[bled12345]

Fuck this, my blues song is better than this. http://soundcloud.com/loopholbrook/the-black-wiis


Lol wow. I love the blues... And this fucking blows. Its you just playing some very noob blues acales and a couple chords. Im all for supporting ppl with their music but you shit on mine and then post this garbage? Wow lol

[Diggles]

Fuck this, my blues song is better than this. http://soundcloud.com/loopholbrook/the-black-wiis

I could shit out better music than this and it wouldn't be as dissonant.

[Recycled Children]

I dig it. It's repetitive but not shabby. I don't really understand that long pause about half way through. If it's for effect it might just be too long.

[Diggles]

I'm having a tough time with the bridge from the main chorus to the finish too hence the blank nothing sound for 20 seconds hahahaha. But cheers man thanks!

[Recycled Children]

Need to stop reading the first sentence only.

[georgie]

i mean you can use that long pause to build the beat. i dont like how it goes from silent to sounding like you just forwarded into the middle of a song(if im explaining that right)

or like the song ended and you rewinded it 10 seconds back. i dont mean to flame on the song i dig it. i just could see this shit catch fires with a little fixes

you could probably fill in half of that long pause with a fade idk music terms but i mean fade as in when the song usually fades when it ends but in this case it goes from fade to back to original volume or w.e

[bled12345]

haha thanks man, i'll be sure to post the finished track when its done!

P.S. Xenogears = best game ever made

[bled12345]

but wait nm thats a FFT avatar isnt it? lol